Document: draft-murray-auth-ftp-ssl-15.txt From: John Loughney Date: 14 oktober 2004 Technically, the document is ready, but it needs an additional editorial pass. File a No Objection, but request an additional editorial pass. Comments: 1) References need splitting. 2) Draft is using RFC2026 boilerplate, needs update 3) ToC is off. 4) Footers need to be fixed, they currently say: Ford-Hutchinson FORMFEED[Page 1] 5) Abstract reads more like an introduction, it should be shortened. 6) Need blank line between paragraphs in many places. 7) Page 4: "The File Transfer Protocol (FTP) currently defined in [RFC-959] and in place on the Internet is an excellent mechanism for exchanging files. " Superfluous text, delete. Most file exchangers are using non-IETF protocols these days .... 8) Sub-section titles shouldn't be indented. 9) 1st page header should be corrected. 10) Section 11 has formatting problems. 11) IPR & Copyright text need updating.