Document: draft-ietf-sigtran-rfc3057bis-01.txt
From: Mary Barnes
Date: 13 oktober 2004 

Assignment: 
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ISDN Q.921-User Adaptation Layer (Proposed Standard) - 3 of 5 
draft-ietf-sigtran-rfc3057bis-01.txt 
Token: Jon Peterson 
Reviewer: Mary Barnes 

Summary: 
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Draft should be ready for publishing as a proposed standard
with the correction of the nits identified below.

 Caveat:
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I primarily focused on the identified deltas from RFC 3057,
however, there were some things that were also in RFC 3057 that I
think should be corrected since they'll be editting anyways to correct
the template.

 Nits:
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- Needs updating to new template reflecting RFC 3668/3667. Note also
  that the copyright in the back, as well as the front, needs updating
  as it's currently dated 2001.

 - Section 1.4.3: "A set of primitives....are defined..." should read
   "A set of primitives...is defined..."

- Section 1.5.1: "TEI" and "SAPI" should be expanded here (they're not
  defined until section 3.2 on page 19 ).

 - Section 2.0, I would suggest moving the reference to RFC 2119
   conventions to the beginning of section 1.2 since those conventions
   are used prior to section 2.0.

 - Section 3.2, page 18, Figure 6 should be labeled as Figure 5 (this
   was an error left from the movement of Figure 2 in RFC 3057 to the
   appendix).

 - Section 9.1, Reference [3], Is there not a draft name to associate
   with this reference or should this be RFC3788? [I didn't search the
   internet drafts archive for a bis draft, but didn't see one listed
   on the WG charter page.]




Mary H. Barnes 
mary.barnes@nortelnetworks.com