Document: draft-ietf-sasl-plain-07.txt
Review: Mary Barnes
Date: 2 mars 2005 


Editorial nits: 
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- Title: "Plain" should be all caps for consistency with remainder of document. 

- Status of Memo: the first paragraph is no longer necessary. 

 - section 1, page 2, 6th paragraph: "...indicate that the this..." should be "...indicate that this..." 

- section 2, page 3, 2nd paragraph following the grammar: I would
suggest changing the word "discouraged" to more normative terminology
such as "NOT RECOMMENDED".

 - section 2, page 4, 2nd paragraph: The last sentence is unclear: 
"It is not mandatory to allow the server 
 to employ other preparation algorithms (including none) as necessary 
 to interoperate with external systems." 
I would suggest changing to something like (at a minimum remove "as" before necessary): 
" It SHOULD NOT be required for the server to employ other preparation
algorithms to interoperate with external systems."

- section 4, page 5, 1st paragraph following the pseudo-code:
  "...called to prepared the password..." should be "...called to
  prepare the password...".