Document: draft-ietf-netlmm-nohost-req-04.txt Reviewer: john.loughney@nokia.com Review Date: Thursday 8/31/2006 6:08 AM CST IESG Telechat Date: 31 August 2006 Summary: I noticed that Brian has already issued his ballot on this, but I had written-up some rough comments on this, so I'm sending them for completeness sake. These are mostly nits, but I generally have to say that overall, the document doesn't seem very readable. 1) Contributor section at the beginning seems odd, and the second sentence seems a bit gratitous. I'd suggest moving it to the acknowledgement section and dropping the last sentence. Gerardo Giaretta, Kent Leung, Katsutoshi Nishida, Phil Roberts, and Marco Liebsch all contributed major effort to this document. Their names are not included in the authors' section due to the RFC Editor's limit of 5 names. 2) The 1 sentence abstract is a bit weak, I think it could state a bit more. 3) Editorially, I found the entire document difficult to read. It took me several re-reads to make heads-or-tails of the document, but then again, I should probably read drafts earlier in the day (or after a stiff cup of coffee). 4) Some of section 2 seems like design trade-offs or design considerations more than goals. 5) Appendix, section 8.6 has an entry called Micro. but it isn't clear if the document means Cellular IP or HAWAII or generally all micromobility protocols.