Document: draft-ietf-ediint-as2-17.txt
From: John Loughney
Date: 25 oktober 2004 

Review of:
MIME-based Secure Peer-to-Peer Business Data Interchange over the Internet 
Using HTTP AS2 draft-ietf-ediint-as2-17.txt 

Formatting problems are so severe, I'd recommend a revision before considering
this draft.  The text is somewhat dense and hard to parse, so the formatting
problems really make this impossible to read.  I can try to re-read the draft
for technical comments and will update this review if I find anything.

In summary, I'd issue a discuss on this because of formatting - I doubt this passes
the ID-Nits.

John

Major
1) What is AS2?  This needs to be explained somewhere.

Questions
1) The introduction discusses the relationship of this draft to other EDI RFCs.
   Does this document update / obsolete any of these RFCs? If so, it should mention
   it explicitly.

Nits
1) Header & footer on page 1 should be removed.
2) Lots of editing problems - bullet lists should be reformatted, 
   sections should be left justified, blank lines should be inserted
   after section titles, ToC should list page numbers, bulleted lists
   have formatting problems (page 6, for example).