Document: draft-gellens-mime-bucket-03.txt
Review: Mary Barnes
Date: 29 mars 2005 

 Summary: 
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The draft should be ready for publication as a proposed standard with
the correction of a few editorial nits.  

Editorial comments: 
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- Section 2, page 4: The paragraph starting with "Specifically," isn't
  grammatically correct at all. I would suggest changing the
  "Specifically," to "This document specifically supports the
  following:" and then replacing the "." with "," in the first three
  bullets and placing an "and" at the end of the third bullet. Also,
  the identation for the first bullet is incorrect. 

- Section 3, page 5, first paragraph, last sentence is a bit awkward
  and inconsistent with sectin 4: I would suggest to simplify that
  sentence as "Future types which contain ambiguity are strongly
  encouraged to include this parameter." The normative inclusion of
  the parameter is appropriately addressed in section 4. If you feel
  it's important to discuss optionality in this section of the doc,
  then that last sentence should be modeled after section 4; e.g. "For
  future media types the parameter may be optional or required, as
  appropriate." 

 - Section 3, page 5, third paragraph under "Parameter value": "An
   element MAY includes..." should be "An element MAY include..." 

- Section 5, there's a missing double quote in the "Note:" section.