Document: draft-ietf-inch-iodef-12.txt
Reviewer: Christian Vogt
Review Date: 9 May 2007
IESG Telechat date: 10 May 2007

Summary:

This draft is in a good condition.  Especially the introduction provides
a reasonable understanding of the purpose and background of the standard
for an unexperienced reader.  Few comments below, though.

Comments:

I found that it might be useful to allow a telephone number to be
accompanied by a time range during which it should be used.  E.g., it
might be ok to call an office number between 8 am and 5 pm, but a
cell-phone number should be used outside this time range.  Possibly, the
free-form "meaning" attribute in the Telephone class could be used for
this purpose.  If so, it might be useful to state this explicitly in the
document.

In addition, some editorial nits:

- Section 2.4, page 8:
  s/encoding of the document are/encoding of the document is/

  [I'm not 100% sure if "data" goes with singular or plural in
  the English language, since I'm not a native speaker.  But from
  the information I found, it should be singular in this context.]

- Section 2.13, page 10:
  s/A telephone number/A telephone or fax number/

- Section 3.7.1, page 22:
  s/Regional Latin-American/Latin-American/

- Section 7.1, page 62:
  s/A example/An example/